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Post by Jkohn™ on Jul 21, 2007 12:00:27 GMT -4
im comin wit a verse you aint even gotta listen to. i stay on the west where niggas bang with ya red or blue i got them boys and they gonna bang with me im comin with more drama than bobby and whitney. im comin with the heat thas hotter than summer time im raisin up that glock that'll shoot you up rain or shine im throwin this verse down and i got it on lock so im jkohn still reppin the block.
i hear ya paullwall this ya partner in crime on this song holla back
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Post by Jkohn™ on Jul 21, 2007 12:06:44 GMT -4
we posted up beatin down ya block, im comin wit my buddy buckin hollowtip shots. when we come ya we aint alone. ya talk a big game we outside ya home. ya you so quick cuz to be a snitch, busted ya face open doctors cant even stich. i told you im the freshest outta the west side livin by the color red thas how i reside. ya we bangin on this beat makin a dope track, your girl gettin lippy she gettin pimped smacked. ya we serious and we down completely, so step up and try to get at me. im so ill so damn sadistic on this track, im buckin so hard yeah im comin right back. ill smack ya up jus like i was ya momma, comin wit a verse thas causin musical drama.
thas a verse from mine and paullwall's song called get at me
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Post by lck4da2sm0kah on Jul 21, 2007 15:50:33 GMT -4
[glow=red,2,300]i like the "westate boys yeah we stay on da block" but it sounded kinda boy bandish get deeper, make your verses stronger, jkohn i have to say u impressed me with ur audio...[/glow]
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Post by PauLLwauLL™ on Jul 21, 2007 19:42:11 GMT -4
thanks for the feed appericiated
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Post by Jkohn™ on Jul 25, 2007 20:35:34 GMT -4
yeah thas good lookin out lck do you think you can give me some more ideas on what i need to do to get better
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Post by lck4da2sm0kah on Jul 28, 2007 16:40:07 GMT -4
[glow=red,2,300]Yeah i'd like to see more punches, example-->Fly like a magic carpet, Fresh like a pack of orbit things like that...ur flow is good...but i wanna hear your ryhmes stay in motion, THERE SHOULD BE NO AWKWARD PAUSES IN AN AUDIO VERSE!!!......just keep writing and spittin and your shit will develop....your vocabulary will increase....and you will eventually get to the point where you, yourself can find ways to improove ur verses when u read them on paper or on the screen...keep at it tho!![/glow]
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Post by Jkohn™ on Jul 29, 2007 21:32:16 GMT -4
thas good lookin out i appreciate the feed back real talk
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Post by JPRO™ on Jul 29, 2007 22:08:36 GMT -4
yo this is jpro n i keep it pimpin. 13 yrs in the game n i already got these ladies trippin.ill smash u on the gridiron or on the hardwood n from day to day im the youngest member claimin west state.black on black j's stuntin through ya city.schoolin all ya'll cats gettin down to the nitty gritty. i forget the rest i have it written but its at jkohns crib
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